you created a beautifully sad feeling here... i like what you've done with the form.
So well done with this difficult form. You pulled it off beautifully.
Nice write, strong person on this poem
oh dang, you even carried last to first in your stanzas....you def make it look effortless....wow...
The Than Bauk form is a hard one and not only do you do it well, but you had to get fancy with it to boot! Very nicely done.
I think this is both clever and BRAVE. I'm so weird about repetitions. (I think it's because I have a tendency to use the same word more than once in a poem by accident). But your repetitions here fulfill the requirements, but do so much more, they exaggerate and intensify the message in such an important way making this so sharp, and so emotional. Well done, you!
the black wine is intriguing...
The iterations deeped the emotional impact, like the good villanelle, nicely done!
nicely done. Really love how you built a real sense of emotion into your piece here. Having a great time reading these Than Bauk's tonight. Such a cool form. Thanks
I love the freedom and the rhythms you give it. Beautifully accomplished.
very nicely done. I found the repetition of words to add another dimension to the piece.
you are all so kind...thank you.
Interesting -- the form PLUS the extra first syllable. Very creative.PS -- do you know that you have CAPTCHA activated for word verification to enter a comment. It is a pain in the butt -- please consider turning off. I had to submit this three times!
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