Thursday, January 3, 2013

Lune of a loon

five three five
such strict rules, i fear
i will falter

so simple yet
rules are made for breaking
rebel am i

without a cause
or even a clue, actually
what about it?

syllables or words
shall it be a kelly
or a collum?





18 comments:

Brian Miller said...

ha. the good
news is you got it
done, just right.

rumoursofrhyme said...

Three words followed
by five, then three more;
a Collom lune.

And yours obeyed the form immaculately.

Sabio Lantz said...

Well, you tried
The rebell will never die
Don't ask why

Bodhirose said...

Very creative...fun and love that rebel!

Cressida de Nova said...

Not bad for a rebellious ole hip chick:)

marousia said...

*smiles*

Semaphore said...

I would say,
Given the evidence, these are
Perfect Collom lunes.

Well done - and definitely made me smile!

Claudia said...

haha..and you didn't break the rules at all...smiles

kkkkaty said...

...glad someone used the lune-loon connection ...thought about it...good on you!

Kim Nelson said...

one of the most amusing responses to today's prompt. well done.

http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/01/04/la-lune/

Other Mary said...

Haha - great!

cloudfactor5 said...

Sometimes writing about how we approach writing is the perfect solution! Really enjoyed these Lunes !

Gretchen Leary said...

Perfect, just perfect (and witty)

Heaven said...

I enjoyed the witty post, as well as the lune comments ~

Well done ~

RMP said...

i find counting words a tad less frustrating than syllables, definitely a cute verse.

Kelvin S.M. said...

...Ironically perfect... Oh, great you... Smiles...

Anders Woje Ellingsen said...

Rules are not made for breaking if you will adhere to the being. :-) Take The Ten Commandments as an example. :-)

dragyonfly said...

Y'all are too kind. Anders you are very correct. I am finally learning.